Tuesday, November 8, 2011

Improved poem :) please comment?

Reallllllly good. I like the rhyme scheme. And the rhythm is pretty good. Only thing that I would say if I had to: you could improve would be where it says" Pastel the nose..." For some reason pastel sounds funny used like that. But I'm not a poet or anything, what do I know? I think it's really neat. Great poem!

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